Hey, this sounds pretty good, not bad at all. I just have some advice i want to throw out there.  The vocal is good but it has the same constant emotion through ou the song and doesn't change up.  it also doesn't sound like the rapper/singer is convinced of the words he is saying.  I am not hearing the excitement, or sadness or happiness or any emotion really.  This song could really be great if the rapper were actually thinking of the words and he is saying them.  when we speak in conversation, there is usually emotion behind it, that needs to carry over to the song. Otherwise it sounds like the song isn't going anywhere and dragging.  Almost like a person singing when they are really tired.  The vocal and tone is good but lacking the luster and energy.  That is usually what makes a song stand out, you have to make the song believable.  Put some attitude and give it that edge.  Otherwise it won't sound memorable.  Hope this help.  I took lessons for years and I understand what it takes to change.  You are on the right track so don't ever give up, just change a few of these things and watch your music come alive. best of luck

Trisha