Hi

I be Jazz D, very new to RP but love the beats on the site, produced 3 full songs and a few Demo's(do the recording and mixing myself)

Feedback on the quility of the song, rythm, passion, emotion and lyrics would be very much appreaciated.

Song is 2 minutes 06 seconds long, i do not do the chorus, only the verse.

Please be gentle with it, its a very fragile track\demo (kidding :D) critics,sarcasm,hatred,anything you like, just so that i can know my rap quality and my recording's quality

http://www.quickshare.co.za/fi…..b.mp3.html

Peace!

hey i like your song but your lyrics could use some work.

i am a ghostwriter and this is a verse im gonna give you free of charge.

Verse:

Girl, your man ain't nutin' but a scrub.

You should get rid of him and let me show you real love.

Cuz girl we both know when push comes to shove.

When in laying with your man it's me your thinking of.

Shawty he ain't the one, who can give you what you want.

i can be the kind of nigga that you always tryna flaunt.

i can turn your life to paradice in the sun.

Baby, girl you need a man who can love you for what you are.

Your A star, and you shine brighter than super nova.

cuz on girl enjoy life before your life is over.

girl, you gotta sail the boat though it might tip over.

baby, i can keep you warm when the nights get colder.

baby, i'm a soldier, be my army wife.

cut that nigga cord like a swiss army knife.

you can say that this is the sweetest shit that you have ever heard.

long as promise me that you gon kick em to the curb.

ayo Jazz get back to me

@Young Chicon, stay up homie!