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Need some feedback on lyrics
7:10 pm12/10/10
falcon63
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Just wrote this story-telling song to “Shady Deeds”. Tell me HONESTLY what you think. YOU CAN'T HURT MY FEELINGS!
**** = Hook
#### = Sound Effect
>>>> = Skip
****yeah, i can see
your delirious insanity
but if you take my hand
i'll set you free****
back on top, in my domain
up and runnin this shit again
i'm the greatest, i'm the greatest
i can never be contained
whatever they say, it's all for show
they can never fuck up my flow
when they try, when they try
i say fuck all them bitch ass zoes
fuck the world, fuck society
fuck all those who try to break me
fuck the critics, fuck the emmys
fuck all them cops, judges, and juries
i been crowned, i been crowned
the realest motherfucker here pound-for-pound
cant bring me down, cant bring me down
the only way to stop me is ####click click pow####
****if you believe everything you see
you'll find out eventually
the way the world is
and how they try to decieve****
>>>>
whatever they do, whatever they say
it don't matter, cause im here to stay
aint goin nowhere, aint givin up
whatever they say, i dont give a fuck
dont give a fuck, what they think bout me
if they listen to my lyrics, they will see
that through the fame, through the glory
my words aren't shit, they tell a story
about a man, who's seen it all
from rags to riches, my downfall
from champ to chump, on a dime
i've seen it all in my lifetime
endless love, flushed down the drain
only wanted me, for my fame
on the streets, back again
to that special place, where my story began
had no father, wasn't there
didnt give a fuck, didnt care
in the streets, all alone
no one there, on my own
late at night, my mother would come
blazed as fuck, back to the slum
until one day, she grabbed a knife
and in one second, took her life
no one there, to provide
my only option, to subside
to the life, of a thug
pimpin hoes, doin drugs
in a moment, it all changed
became estranged, let out my rage
in the pen, with no protection
this was my path to redemption
****i dont want forgiveness
i dont deserve it
my victims are scarred for life
because ive been selfish
im dying inside
my heart feels cold
im losing my mind
losing all control****
flashbacks coming, to my mind
wishing id just click rewind
can't go back, already done
leaves behind his only son
why'd i do this, i cant see
now he has, no family
i felt this pain, it hurts real bad
to think i'd do this, makes me sad
been down this road, down it before
feel that ive evened the score
just want to take that same old knife
used by my mom to take her life
stick it in, my cold heart
leave it there, till i rot
have no reason, to survive
cause i took, another's life
****redemption wont comes easy
but i need it badly
to clear my conscious
of all my sinful deeds****
please forgive me, please dont cry
didnt have time, to say goodbye
now hes there, up in the sky
and im down here to apologize
dont deserve, your forgiveness
but im right here, god as my witness
take my hand, ill set you free
please just grant me amnesty
i know its hard, but hes not gone
up there singing, his swan song
your forgiveness, sets me free
nullified my sinful deeds
tried too hard, hit and missed
burned down just like Icarus
redeemed myself, found new love
for that special, place above
****that my story
from start to finish
how in one second
your fame can vanquish****
****just another player
on gods playing board
anytime he wants
he can pull the cord
life aint a game
its for real
you fuck with destiny
your fate is sealed****